5．5. 4　Narrative Movements情节发展的层次

5．5. 4　Narrative Movements情节发展的层次

The boy went out．They had eaten with no light on the table and the old man took off his trousers and went to bed in the dark．He rolled his trousers up to make a pillow，putting the newspapers inside them．He rolled himself in the blanket and slept on the other old newspaper that covered the springs of the bed．He was asleep in a short time and he dreamed of Africa when he was a boy and the long golden beaches and the white beaches，so white they hurt your eyes，and the high capes and the great brown mountains．He lived along that coast now every night and in his dreams heard the surf roar and saw the native boats come riding through it．He smelled the tar and oakum of the deck as he slept and he smelled the smell of Africa that the land breeze brought at morning．

(excerpt from The Old Man and the Sea by American writer Hemingway)

孩子去了。他俩吃饭的时候，桌子上连个灯都没有。孩子走开以后，老头儿脱掉裤子，摸黑上了床。他把裤子卷成枕头，把报纸塞在里边，然后用军毯裹住身子，睡在破床弹簧上面的旧报纸上。

他不久就睡着了，梦见了他儿童时代所看到的非洲，长长的金黄色的海滩和白色的刺眼的海滩、高耸的海岬和褐色的大山。现在，他每晚住在海边，在梦中听到了海潮的怒号，看见了本地的小船从海潮中穿梭来去。睡着的时候，他闻见到了甲板上的柏油和填絮的味道，闻到了地面上的风在早晨送来的非洲的气息。

Comments: When writing a narrative，one of the attentions narrative movements should be kept in mind to present the events of our narration in a logical and coherent order．The time sequence in narration is usually chronological．We may want to use an occasional“flashback，”that is，inserting an event from past in the midst of a chronological flow．Events should be linked by smooth transitions．In this passage，our impression is that Hemingway tends to use short sentences and arranges narration quite well，which is primarily organized in logical and time order although there few connectives．It is very clear to find out the narrative movements in the first paragraph，in which the actions like “took off”and “went to bed” ，“rolled” ，“putting”and “slept”happen in the logical order．In order to conform the narrative movements，the translator add the phrase孩子走开以后and然后．In the second paragraph，the narrative movements are arranged in time order．At the same time，the flashback can been found“in his dreams” ．